What to Do When a Piece Isn’t Working

Every writer encounters the problem of when a piece isn’t working — drafts that resist completion, arguments that won’t resolve, writing that feels wrong in ways that are hard to name. Knowing what to do when a piece isn’t working is as much a part of the craft as knowing how to write when it is.

The difficulty is that a piece that isn’t working rarely announces the reason clearly. It presents as a feeling — a vague dissatisfaction, a reluctance to return to the draft, a sense that something is wrong without a clear diagnosis of what. Acting on that feeling productively requires being able to move from the symptom to the cause, and the cause is usually one of a small number of things.

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How I Use Notes Before Drafting

Notes before drafting serve a different purpose from an outline. An outline is a structure imposed on material that has already been thought through — a map of a piece that has been, in some sense, pre-written. Notes are something earlier and looser than that: the raw thinking that precedes structure, the place where material accumulates before it has been organised into anything.

The distinction matters because conflating the two produces a particular kind of failure. The writer who skips notes and goes straight to an outline is imposing order on thinking that has not yet been done — and the outline, however detailed, will tend to be a structure built on assumptions rather than on the actual content of the argument. The piece that results follows the structure but does not necessarily arrive anywhere.

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How I Decide What to Leave Out

Deciding what to leave out is one of the most consequential choices a writer makes — and one of the hardest. What to include is a question the first draft answers loosely. What to remove is a question only the writer can answer precisely, because the material being cut is material the writer has already written, already thought about, already invested in.

Cutting is where writing becomes what it is. A first draft contains everything the writer thought might be relevant. A finished piece contains what actually is. The distance between those two states is measured in the material that was removed, and the quality of the finished piece depends largely on how well those removal decisions were made.

The Test I Use First When Deciding What to Leave Out

Before cutting anything, I try to apply a single question to each element of the piece: does this serve the piece’s purpose for this reader?

The question has two parts, and both matter. Does it serve the purpose — does it contribute to what the piece is trying to do, or is it present because it was interesting to research, or because it felt relevant at the drafting stage, or because removing it would mean admitting that a section of the draft did not work? And does it serve this reader — is it pitched at the right level of knowledge, does it say something the reader cannot infer from what surrounds it, does it justify the time it will take to read?

Material that fails either part of the test is a candidate for cutting. Material that fails both is almost certainly gone.

The hardest material to cut is material that passes the purpose test but fails the reader test — the section that is genuinely relevant to the argument but goes into more depth than the reader needs. This requires a judgment about how much is enough, which varies by piece and by reader and cannot be reduced to a rule. The signal I look for is whether I am writing for myself or for the reader — whether the detail is there because it matters to the argument or because I find it interesting. The second reason is not sufficient.

What Cutting Actually Removes

The standard advice is to cut the parts readers tend to skip — a formulation that is right but incomplete, because it assumes the writer can identify those parts without difficulty. In practice, the parts readers tend to skip are not always obvious to the writer, because the writer has context that the reader lacks.

What cutting actually removes, in most well-written drafts, is one of three things.

The first is the warm-up: the material at the beginning of the piece where the writer was finding their way in. This almost always runs longer than necessary. The actual beginning of the piece — the moment where the thinking arrives — is usually buried a paragraph or two in. Everything before it is the writer’s warm-up, and the reader does not need to watch it.

The second is the over-explanation: the section that explains what has already been established, or that draws a conclusion the reader is fully capable of drawing for themselves. This is the instinct to close every gap, to make sure nothing has been missed. In practice, it produces prose that does not trust the reader — and readers, even when they cannot name what is happening, respond to distrust by losing interest.

The third is the tangent: the material that was interesting at the drafting stage but does not belong to the piece that was written. Every draft contains tangents — thoughts that were genuinely relevant to the thinking but are not relevant to the argument. They were worth following in the first draft. They are not worth keeping in the final one.

The Rule That Guides the Final Pass

When deciding what to leave out at the final pass — after everything obviously removable has gone, there is usually still material that could go but does not obviously need to. This is the hardest stage of cutting — not because the decisions are difficult but because the energy for them has usually been spent.

The rule I use for the final pass is: if a sentence could be removed without the piece losing anything — if its absence would not be noticed — it should go. This is a stricter version of the purpose test. It is not asking whether the sentence is relevant but whether it is necessary. Relevant sentences that are not necessary produce writing that is slightly longer than it needs to be, slightly less precise than it could be, and slightly harder to read than the reader deserves.

The resistance to this rule is real. Every sentence that survives to the final draft has been kept for a reason, and removing it feels like a small defeat. But the sentence that could be removed without loss is doing no work. And a piece with no sentences doing no work is a piece that respects the reader’s time — which is, in the end, a form of respect for the reader.


Deciding what to leave out is not a separate activity from writing. It is the final stage of thinking — the point at which the writer decides what the piece actually is, as opposed to what it might have been. The cut material is not wasted. It was part of the process that produced the piece. It simply does not belong in the piece itself.

What remains should be what could not be removed.

Writing Without an Audience in Mind

Most writing advice assumes an audience. Define your reader, the advice goes. Know who you are writing for. Understand what they need, what they already know, what they want to feel when they finish. This is sound advice for most professional writing, and following it produces work that is clear, purposeful, and appropriately pitched.

It is also, for certain kinds of writing, a way of not writing at all.

The essay that is conceived entirely in terms of its audience tends to produce a particular kind of writing — competent, oriented, reader-friendly, and slightly hollow. The writer who asks, at every stage, what the reader needs, is not asking what they actually think. The two questions are different, and they produce different writing. One produces a service. The other produces a piece of work.

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Writing the Opening

Writing the opening paragraph is the hardest part of any piece, and the most rewritten. It is also the most important — not because it determines whether the reader continues (though it does), but because it determines what the piece is. The opening is not just the first thing the reader encounters. It is the frame through which everything that follows will be understood.

This is why getting the opening wrong is costly in a way that getting a middle paragraph wrong is not. A weak paragraph in the body of a piece can be revised without affecting what surrounds it. A weak opening distorts the whole — it sets the wrong expectations, establishes the wrong register, and asks the reader to travel in a direction the piece does not actually go. Fixing a weak opening often requires rethinking the piece.

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What Finishing a Piece Actually Feels Like

Finishing a piece of writing is not what the productivity literature suggests it will be. The advice — celebrate your wins, acknowledge the achievement, feel proud of what you’ve done — assumes that finishing produces a clear positive emotion that needs to be recognised and reinforced. Sometimes it does. More often, the experience of finishing is more complicated than that, and the complication is worth paying attention to.

The most common feeling at the end of a piece, in my experience, is not satisfaction. It is something closer to deflation — a sudden absence of the pressure that the unfinished piece had been exerting. The piece was taking up space: in the mind during other activities, in the early hours of the morning, in the gap between one task and the next. When it is done, that space empties. The relief is real, but so is the strangeness of the empty space.

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Why Proofreading Gets Harder

Proofreading your own work is harder than proofreading someone else’s, and it gets harder the longer you have spent with a piece. This is not a matter of carelessness or insufficient attention. It is a feature of how the brain reads — and understanding it changes how you approach the final stage of editing.

The difficulty has a name in cognitive science: it is sometimes called familiarity blindness, or inattentional blindness. The brain, when reading, does not process every word individually. It pattern-matches — it recognises shapes, anticipates what comes next, and fills in gaps from context and expectation. This is efficient. It is what allows a fluent reader to read quickly and extract meaning without consciously decoding each word. But it also means that a reader who already knows what a text says will tend to see what they expect to see rather than what is actually there.

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The First Draft Problem

The first draft has a problem that most writing advice obscures: it is not a draft of the piece. It is a draft of the thinking. And thinking, in its early stages, is neither coherent nor presentable. It circles, qualifies, contradicts itself, arrives at the wrong place, and occasionally surprises the writer by going somewhere better than intended.

This is not a malfunction of the first draft. It is the first draft doing exactly what it is supposed to do. The problem arises when writers mistake the first draft for something it is not — for a preliminary version of the final piece, which will be corrected into shape. A preliminary version of the final piece would only require editing. What most first drafts actually require is a reckoning.

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How I Approach Revision

Revising writing is not the same as editing it. The distinction matters because confusing the two leads to a particular kind of failure: a piece that is technically clean — no grammatical errors, no awkward sentences — but still not working. The sentences are correct. The piece is not right.

Editing is the process of making a piece technically correct. Revision is the process of making it true — not factually accurate, necessarily, but true in the sense of being what it set out to be. A revised piece has earned its conclusion. Its argument has been tested and held. Its structure serves the thinking rather than constraining it. These are different achievements from a piece that has been merely edited, and they require different work.

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Writing as Discovery — I Don’t Write Because I Know

Writing as discovery is not a technique. It is not a method you choose, the way you might choose a structure or a style. It is something you either trust or you don’t — and most writers, at least early in their practice, don’t.

I used to assume that writing required certainty. That before I sat down to begin, I should already know what I believed, what I wanted to say, and where the argument would land. The page, I thought, was for articulation, not discovery. You worked out the thinking first, and then you wrote it down.

Experience has taught me otherwise.

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